tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-566910144128958757.post1015874005054794600..comments2023-04-30T00:48:50.178-07:00Comments on Core Biology I Honors: Emma Cancer Free. Anonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08576127734266494869noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-566910144128958757.post-72023913339863972042012-12-10T18:11:18.959-08:002012-12-10T18:11:18.959-08:00I think Andrew did a very good job with this curre...I think Andrew did a very good job with this current event report. I liked the tone that he set with his report, which was very capturing. He started generally with what topic the article was covering, and then went into the specifics of the girl and her conditions/what could help her recover and what eventually did. He created a level of suspense in his report that got me hooked and got me to finish reading his report very quickly, always wanting to know what was going to happen next. I thought it was very interesting how the personal experiences of the doctor played such an important role in this incident. I also found it pretty crazy how the girl was recovered after two weeks, since she was so infected with cancer over a long period of time. One thing that Andrew could improve on would be some spelling mistakes and grammatical errors, however those could easily be revised with a proof-read. Ferdinand Schmuckhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09876628559730027883noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-566910144128958757.post-11927093077006738702012-12-10T17:02:16.071-08:002012-12-10T17:02:16.071-08:00Isabelle Shinsato 12/10/1...Isabelle Shinsato 12/10/12 Emma Cancer Free Comment Core Biology <br /><br /> Andrew did an excellent job with this review. There were many aspects of it that I liked. First, I liked how he explained the process and consequences of the experimental treatment it was very clear and easy to understand. I also liked how he kept reiterating that the doctors and parents had nothing to lose in giving her the experimental treatment because it just showed how sick Emma was and how the fact that she ended up cancer free was a remarkable result. He summarized the article very well, it had a nice flow to it and instead of just presenting fact after fact it was almost like he was telling a story. It was amazing to me that the treatment only took two weeks to be effective in completely treating Emma’s cancer because it usually takes years to cure any type of cancer and even if its cured there’s always a possibility of it coming back and I just found it remarkable that it took such little time to work. I find this article really fascinating because it shows that there is an outstanding chance that one day there can be a drug that can completely cure cancer. Andrew did a great job reviewing this article and he was able to show that he really cared about this subject. My only suggestion would be to check over the report again because I saw a few grammatical mistakes but otherwise I think this was a very well written review.Isabelle Shinsatohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16133278169851177436noreply@blogger.com